I'm back to writing a poem every day, whether they stink or not.

Monday, April 10, 2006

One Man Down

Underneath a sickle-moon
he retched over the bow
and saw a mermaid in the sea
bid him to her now.

His candle shown like starlight
in the midnight of her hair.
He tried to jump into the ice
and find a true love there.

I will go down with you
to the bottom of the blue.
And if we don’t return
you can have what you have earned.
My bony smile’s for you
when my body’s rotted through.

When he woke up on the deck
he steered his ship toward shore.
He vowed to find his wife and kill
the man she’d left him for.

He’ll say to her “I’m leaving you;
this will be our last fight.
I’ve found love in the icy sea,
I’m going there tonight.”

I will go down with you
to the bottom of the blue.
And if we don’t return
you can have what you have earned.
My bony smile’s for you
when my body’s rotted through.

4 comments:

Eric Dutton said...

So... this is my attempt at songwriting. During the idle-mind hours of my job, I'll junk a verse or two together when I get tired of hearing radio tunes whip around in my head. This is one I decided to flesh out tonight.
Don't ask me to sing it. It's not worth it.

Squamish Writers Group said...

Hmmm, certainly a departure! The rhymes work well, not a lot of stretching.

I liked the imagery in this - beautiful

His candle shown like starlight
in the midnight of her hair.

I thought this was the weakest line

bid him to her now.

Hey, could you sing it for me?

Eric Dutton said...

I'm trying to figure out how to add audio files to the blog. I'm not interested in using the phone-in audioblogger option, though. If anyone knows how, let me know.

Pat Paulk said...

Eric I love sea tales/songs!! Excelllent!!